P3 English Model Composition – A Lost Puppy

As we reach the halfway mark in our year, the P3 teachers have been reviewing their students’ progress and reflecting on the positives and challenges of the past 6 months, including ways that we can maintain the students’ good results as well as ways that we can help those who may need more encouragement and support from us.

Today’s model composition comes for one of the students in our P3 classes. Her composition was picked as a model composition for her level and she was very proud that it was chosen. We too are proud of you H!

The 3 pictures were a girl receiving a puppy/ girl carrying a bowl of dog food and unable to find her puppy/ girl and parents driving around/ a question mark.

Here are three ways why this composition stands out :

1. Clear and Organised Storyline – Planning

The composition has a clear beginning, middle, and ending. The events happen in a logical order — Jane discovers that Fluffy is missing, searches for him with her father, finds him, and finally brings him home safely. This makes the story easy for readers to follow and understand and shows planning of ideas.

2. Good Use of Descriptive Vocabulary

The writer uses descriptive words and phrases to make the story more interesting. Examples such as “balmy Sunday morning”, “crestfallen”, “vanished into thin air”, and “car tyres screeching” help readers imagine the scenes clearly and understand Jane’s emotions throughout the story.

3. Action and Dialogue Make the Story Engaging

The composition includes both action and dialogue, which make the story more lively and exciting. The conversation between Jane and her mother adds realism, while the scene where Fluffy runs back to Jane creates suspense and excitement. Good job in varying different writing techniques!

A Lost Puppy – P3 English Composition model

            One balmy Sunday morning, Jane woke up. She folded her blanket, put her pillows back neatly and walked out of her room quickly to give Fluffy, her puppy, its breakfast. She counted out four scoops of dog food, putting the food into Fluffy’s bowl. When she got nearer to Fluffy’s favourite spot, she got startled. She saw that her puppy was not there, as if it had vanished into thin air. She was crestfallen.

            She quickly ran into the living room while crying. She found her father reading a comic and her mother reading a fashion magazine. When her mother saw Jane crying, she stood up and walked to Jane.

“What’s going on?” her mother asked.

“I was going to give Fluffy her breakfast when I noticed that she was not in her basket. I also realised that the front door was ajar,” Jane cried as she pointed to the door.

            Jane’s father quickly took his car keys and told her to follow him to search for her missing puppy. She ran immediately to her father’s car.  She felt very worried as Jane’s father drove around the neighbourhood. Sticking her head out of the car window, Jane looked for her lost puppy. She saw many dogs but none of them looked like Fluffy.

            Suddenly she recognised a tail wagging back and forth.  It was Fluffy! She heard the sound of car tyres screeching as her father stopped the car. Jane got out of the car, calling out her puppy’s name. Fluffy ran to Jane and Fluffy collided into the car door in his excitement. Fortunately, it wasn’t hurt!

Jane carried Fluffy into the car and went back home. She promised never to let her puppy wander off again.