This composition was written by my P3 E-learning student. She has been steadily improving over the past 3 months and I am very pleased with her latest composition. The topic was a Birthday Party and like any composition based on the theme of happiness, conjuring up a setting and characters that evoke joy and celebration are essential.
Below I have highlighted the words and phrases she has used to convey this.
Model composition illustration
A birthday Party model composition picture
A Birthday Party model composition
Note to students
The model compositions in this blog are to help students generate ideas and to be used as a guide. Students are not allowed to copy the model compositions and then pass them off as their own work, especially in school. It is called plagiarism.
I celebrated my 8th birthday on the 25th of December with my family and friends. It was a memorable party and I will fondly remember it for a long time. At the dawn of the beautiful day, my mother sent me out for a few errands. When I came back, my house was beautifully decorated with colourful heart-shaped balloons and streamers hanging from the fan to the four corners of the room. I was elated to see a Christmas tree which my father had bought for my birthday as I was born on Christmas day.
I believed that the surprise decorations was my birthday surprise but actually my friends and relatives were hiding in my room. Jumping out, they shouted, “Happy Birthday Shri Kutty!” The wishes hung in the air and I embraced them warmly. I was truly on cloud nine. I could not contain my excitement and I could not wait for my birthday to start. I donned my new princess dress and it was time to cut the cake. My cake was beautiful and it was covered with pink icing and a picture of Princess Aurora on top of the cake,
Everybody chorused the birthday song in unison. I blew out the candles and cut the cake. I punched the air in delight. We enjoyed the eating the cake and played games. We had a whale of a time. I received many gifts from my friends and I thanked them profusely for giving me such thoughtful and delightful gifts.
My mother prepared dinner on that day. The vegetable briyani was top-notch and mouth watering. Soon after, my friends bade me farewell and I gave them goodie bags. That day, I felt like a princess. I was eternally grateful to my parents who organised such a fabulous birthday party for me!
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