P4 English – An unlucky day composition

I have been talking with my P3 and P4 students once a week when we have our live streaming classes and last week I gave them an assignment to give a short book presentation on a book they have read, every week. During our second live streaming class, we worked on the composition An Unlucky Day and the model below is from one of my P4 students.

For this lesson, I reviewed two types of introductions flashback and descriptive and we discussed as a class on the best one.

I hope that all the P3s and P4s out there are making good use of this time. Draw, read and continue developing your writing skills 🙂

Introduction (1) – Descriptive

I opened one eye as sunlight streamed in my room. Yawning lazily, I stretched out my long limbs and wondered what type of day I was going to have. Just as I was dreaming about my mother’s pancakes for breakfast, my bedroom door slammed open and my mother ran in shouting, “Get up! Its 7.10am! The alarm didn’t ring this morning!”

Introduction (2) – Flashback

I stood in Mr. Tan’s office, my knees shaking . Mr. Tan, our fire-breathing principal glared at me with dagger-like eyes, while Mrs Lim, my Mathematics teacher rattled on about how forgetful I was. With trembling fingers, I wiped the cold sweat from my eyes as I recalled the events a few hours ago.

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An unlucky day composition model P4       

I opened one eye as sunlight streamed in my room. Yawning lazily, I stretched out my long limbs and wondered what type of day I was going to have. Just as I was dreaming about my mother’s pancakes for breakfast, my bedroom door slammed open and my mother ran in shouting, “Get up! It is 7.10am! The alarm did not ring this morning!”

            I jumped out of bed like my hair was on fire, forgetting about the pancakes. I changed into my school uniform and splashed water on my face. I ran down the stairs, skipping breakfast. Hopping on to my bicycle I peddled off.

            When I was about to reach school, dark ominous clouds gathered in the sky as the sun disappeared. Big drops of water fell from the sky onto my face as I peddled furiously. When I reached the school gate, I was drenched! I locked my bicycle at the gate where the rest of the bicycles were and ran into school.

            As I stepped into the classroom, water trickled down my face to the floor. Mrs Ng, my Mathematics teacher glared at me and said,” Go and change now!” I nodded my head and left my bag on the seat and went to the General Office. Grabbing a dry uniform, I sighed as I changed. Could this day get any unluckier?

            When I got back to class, Mrs Ng asked me, “Do you have your homework?”

“Let me go get it,” I replied.

I rummaged through my bag and could not even find my file. Then I realised that I had not packed my bag this morning! Oh no! Mrs Ng glared at me as I rubbed my sweaty palms on my uniform.

“Come with me!” she bellowed angrily. I walked towards her, trembling, as she brought me to the staff room.

            Mrs Ng opened the door to the staff room and told me to sit down. I told her what had happened and she said, “You should  be responsible for your own behaviour.” She also gave me a dressing down as I hung my head in shame.

            Once bitten twice shy. After this unlucky day,  learnt to be more responsible. I hoped never to have such an unlucky day again!