P4 English SA2 Model Composition: An Incident you witnessed

Most students have received their SA2 results. While some results are cause for celebration, others are reminders that certain subjects require more effort.

Either way, examinations, while stressful for students (and parents), are good indicators of whether students have understood and applied techniques and skills learnt in schools and in their tuition lessons.

I always ask my students’ parents to send me the students’ papers and comments from their teachers. This will allow me to analyse their mistakes and to also see if they have used what has been taught in class throughout the year. Then, I will have a discussion with each student. This allows each student to take ownership of their work and results. This is a good time to celebrate their strengths but also agree to work on their weak areas the following year.

As the P3s and P4s at Thinking Factory write compositions weekly, I am always particularly happy when my students do well in composition for their examinations.

Last year, I posted an SA2 composition from my then P4 student, Celine. Her school gave her the topic of Being Caught in the Rain and she had scored 19/20.

This year, one of my current P4 students, who is also named Celine, was given the theme of An Incident you Witnessed for her SA2 composition. She too scored 19/20 for her SA2 compo.

The school set 3 pictures which were linked. Below is her composition. I was delighted to see that she had remembered the feedback about her writing that was given and used the writing techniques that I had taught them in class during the P4 year, in her SA2 composition.

Congratulations Celine and keep up the good work!

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An Incident you Witnessed P4 composition model

It was Chinese New Year. My parents had gone to the supermarket to buy Chinese New Year essentials. I did not want to go along with them as I had been feeling unwell but I recovered after they had left. I was really bored. I decided not to be a couch potato and instead go to my neighbour, Lynn’s house, to play with her. I took my keys and phone and headed to Lynn’s house.

              I walked along the corridor to her front door. When I got there, I saw a stranger dressed in a white shirt, with black hair and sunken cheeks, outside Lynn’s house. His appearance frightened me. He had a bag of tools with him which was placed on the ground. He was acting suspiciously. I thought that I had seen this man before. But where? I racked my brain for an answer and found it. This man was the suspect whom the police  came to warn us about a week ago.

              I stood behind a wall and watched what the man was going to do. He took a tool from his bag and tried to unlock the gate of Lynn’s house. The man was a burglar! I felt nervous and scared. I was in a state of panic. I called the police and told the police that a burglar was breaking into Lynn’s house.

“Don’t worry. We’ll be there in five minutes,” assured the police.

I waited behind the wall and watched the events unfold. After five minutes, the police arrived. I was relieved to hear the siren of the police car. The burglar tried to escape but it was too late. The police ambushed him and pushed him against the wall. The police handcuffed him and brought him to the police station.

              Lynn and her family came out of their house and thanked me for my quick-thinking. My parents had also come back from their Chinese New Year shopping. I told them what had happened when they were away and they were pleased to hear what I had done.

              That night I reflected on the day’s events. I was glad that the burglar had been caught. I had learnt a valuable lesson from this incident. I learnt to be always prepared for any situation.